雅思小作文写作分享

　　雅思备考，雅思G类小作文真题6分范文及考官评语主题为“工作自荐”，背景信息较多，应在回应各写作任务过程中有所提及。注：以下范文为原文搬运，保留了所有错误。下面一起跟小编看看吧。
　　Dear Sir,
　　I am Alejandro Garcia, we met last week in a plane journey from London to Manchester. I am writing to tell you that I really want to work in your chain of restaurant because Iam not working at the moment and I need some money.
　　In my last two years I had been working in restaurant as a chef and I have been doing an Indian and an Italian course in a very famous academy. So if I had to choose I would like to be the chef. However, if you already have chefs I wouldn't have problem to work as a waiter.
　　I think I will be suitable for this job because I am a very responsible person and I have been training very hard to have a possibility like this. Also, I have experience working with other people and how to manage a group.
　　I hope you would consider my application. I look forward to hearing from you soon.
　　Yours faithfully
　　Alejandro Garcia

　　考官评语：6分。写信目的清晰，但语气没能前后一致，如Dear Sir 与I am not working at thte moment and I need some money。回应了三个问题，内容连贯清晰，使用了各种连接词。词汇充足，使用恰当，如 I really want to work in your chain or restaurant(s)， working...as a chef, experience working with other people, consider my application. 拼写基本准确。使用了各种简单和复杂的句子结构，语法基本准确。
　　组长补充：正如考官指出的，考生使用了正式的称谓，但有些表达不够正式，会导致TR的失分。从考官对词汇的肯定和举例可以看出，小作文就是需要更多的话题相关表达，给出更多细节信息。